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some people think cities are the best place to live.Others prefer to live in the countryside. discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
The majority of people thought that metropolitans have the greatest live quality,
while
others
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 people rather living in the rural.
This
 post will demonstrate the advantage and disadvantages of both.
First,
living in
theurban
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the urban
 have some
benefit
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benefits
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 than in the countryside. In the metropolitans there have lots of
foreignerss
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foreigners
 who come to your country to travel so there will be a great chance for you to improve your communication.
Moreover
, cities are more
developedhan
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developed
 the rural so the housing equipment is more comfortable.
Although
 these advantages, urban have some drawbacks. Living in
high quality
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high-quality
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 life the living cost will bebe
higherr
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higher
thanin
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than in
than
the
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the
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countryside,
this
make
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 a big
probform
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proform
 to the
financial
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.
In
contrast
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 the
countrysideside
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countryside side
 has
a low living costs
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a low living cost
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 but the quality
life
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of life
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 will
lower
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be lower
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 than in the metropolitans. What is more, the atmosphere is fresher, it
also
 has
a
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spectacular
sight seeing
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sightseeing
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
 it is more hustler than the
urbans
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urban
 but the drawback is it less development of education, some facilities and job
oppotunities
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opportunities
. In conclusion, both of them have either benefits
and
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 drawbacks depending on what lifestyle you like, you can choose a place to live.

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