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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries
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The graph shows how the number of drinks used worldwide. Between 1900 and 200. The agriculture sector was the largest section that uses water at the beginning of
this
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 period was 500 
km
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 but after ,that it significantly increased which achieved 3000 
km
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 in 2000. When it comes, to water used in the industrial and the domestic section, the graph shows From 1990 to 1980 it remained steady which was around o
km
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 but in 1960 the industrial port exceeded that of the domestic it accounted for 1000
km
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while
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 the domestic arrived at 300
km
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. The table gives information on differences in agriculture consumption in 
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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, irrigated land in
Brazil
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 was by far the most used drink compare with
Congo
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, It was 26500 in
Brazil
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while
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 the figure was 100
km
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 in Cong
also
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 there are a lot of people live in
Brazil
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 (176 miles)but in
Congo
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 consisted 8.2 million, as in consequence everyone in
Brazil
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 which consumption of water in
Brazil
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 should be more than in
Congo
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 (382 m For
Brazil
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 and 8 m is
Congo
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)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words km, brazil, congo with synonyms.
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