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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside #dicuss
There is a debate that some
people
 think
live
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 in the
cities
are
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is
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 the best.
However
, others would rather live in the
countryside
 than live in the
cities
.
This
 essay is my opinion about that debate. To be honest,
i
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I
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 think the
countryside
 is
better
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a better
the better
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place
 to live. First and foremost,
peoplle
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people
 should recognize that
the
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apply
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life in those
place
are
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is
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 really peaceful, rural areas do not have
much
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many
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 cars or motorbikes so the pollution and the noise in the
countrysides
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countryside
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 are very low.
Moreover
,
people
live
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who live
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 in the
countryside
 not must feel
stress
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stressed
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 about
the
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money, because the
cost
 of living in rural areas is not high even
it
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if it
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 is very low.
However
, it
also
 has some drawbacks.
For example
, the
economic
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economy
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 is quite backward so it is hard for
people
 can be rich or want to follow their passion. It
also
 does not have a lot of interesting
place
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places
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 for
people
 can come to relax, so it is quite
bored
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boring
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 with a lot of
people
.
On the other hand
, living in the
countryside
also
 has some positive points. It can be seen that the
economic
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economy
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 in the downtowns are very modern and
develop
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developed
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 with very much high-rise buildings and big company for
people
 can get a job with
high
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a high
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 wage.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
cities
 have a lot
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of place
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place
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places
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 for
people
come
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to come
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 to enjoy and relax with family or friends. But they
also
 have very much negative points too. The population density is really high so it
very
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is very
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noise
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noisy
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 and
people
 away feel very uncomfortable so it is not suitable for old and children to live in. Especially, the main reason make
people
 feel do not like
live
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living
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 in the
cities
 is the
cost
 of living
in
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apply
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there
really
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is really
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 high from
cost
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the cost
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 of food,
water
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and water
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 to
cost
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the cost
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 of
apartment
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an apartment
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 or house. In conclusion, I think the rural areas are
the
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apply
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suitable places for
people
dislike
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who dislike
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the
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apply
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noise and do not have much money and the
cities
 are
the
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apply
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suitable places for
people
like
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who like
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 interesting places. But I still feel live the
countryside
 is the best.

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