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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss boths view and give your opinion.

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Many argue that being in the downtown area is a good place to live. Meanwhiles, some people choose to have life in urban
areas
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. It seems to me that a large town is a
liveable
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more liveable
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 place than the others.
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 with, the main advantage of living in the
city
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 is there are better job opportunities, most international companies have offices in the big
city
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.
Moreover
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, jobs in
cities
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 are more diverse.
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, in the countryside, it often requires labour work and the income is very low.
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,
cities
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 provide more high-quality
education
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 compared to rural
areas
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.
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, people who live in the
city
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 can give their offspring better
education
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. A recent study that was conducted in The UK showed that almost 65% of schools in rural
areas
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 lack component teachers and leaving materials.
This
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 needed evidence that
education
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 is better in the big
cities
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. And
last
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 but not least, public transportation is more developed in the urban
areas
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 there are buses, subway, light rail and much more.
However
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, there are some drawbacks that come with living in the
cities
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. First and foremost, urban
areas
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 are facing a range of serious environmental issues
such
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 as air pollution, and water and soil contamination.
Moreover
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, the high cost of living compared to surrounding rural
areas
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. Living expenses
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 as rant daily groceries tend to be higher in larger
cities
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.
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, usually moving from the countryside to the
city
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 include downsizing. Most of the apartments in the big
cities
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 are much smaller and
also
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 it is very difficult to find an outside space like a yard or a patio. In conclusion, living in
cities
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 have its own merits and demerits but in my
opinion
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 having access to better
education
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 and better job opportunities outweigh the cons of living in the
cities
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.

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