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some people think that city is the best place to live while other prefer to live in the countryside. discuss both view and give your opinion

#people #city #place #countryside
With growing needs, more
people
 are now living in
cities
. Few
people
 consider
cities
 as the best place to live
whereas
 there are some
people
 who believe the countryside is better.
This
 essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of living in a city with a conclusion
at the end
. On the one hand, city life provides better employment opportunities,
people
 are paid higher which improves their living standard and becomes easy for them to fulfil all their desires.
For instance
, one of my friends who went to London
last
 year for his work has now bought his own car and house.
Moreover
, most of the prestigious educational
instituations
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institutions
 are located in
cities
 which compels attracts a lot of students.
On the other hand
, the growing industrial and vehicular activities have increased the pollution level in
cities
. Cars and industries release toxic gases which affect the health of
people
, making them move to rural areas in search of fresh air. To illustrate
this
, a recent report from Hindustan Times states that the Shahdara oil refinery
release
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 harmful pollutants
in
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air
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the air
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 which is causing severe breathing problems in the
people
 of Delhi.
In addition
, the building of major industries,
constructions
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of road
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road
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, … is increasing the space available for
people
 to live freely. More
people
 are living in small houses leading to several health disorders. In conclusion, life in a city has both
advatages
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advantages
as well as
 disadvantages. High quality of living and better facilities in
term
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terms
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 of education, medicine … make
cities
 a better place to live
whereas
 the increasing pollution level is gradually making
people
 aware of its consequences.
Thus
, rural areas will seem to be more occupied in future.

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