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some people think that city is the best place to live while other prefer to live in the countryside. discuss both view and give your opinion

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With growing needs, more
people
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 are now living in
cities
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. Few
people
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 consider
cities
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 as the best place to live
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 there are some
people
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 who believe the countryside is better.
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 essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of living in a city with a conclusion
at the end
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. On the one hand, city life provides better employment opportunities,
people
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 are paid higher which improves their living standard and becomes easy for them to fulfil all their desires.
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, one of my friends who went to London
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 year for his work has now bought his own car and house.
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, most of the prestigious educational
instituations
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institutions
 are located in
cities
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 which compels attracts a lot of students.
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, the growing industrial and vehicular activities have increased the pollution level in
cities
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. Cars and industries release toxic gases which affect the health of
people
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, making them move to rural areas in search of fresh air. To illustrate
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, a recent report from Hindustan Times states that the Shahdara oil refinery
release
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 harmful pollutants
in
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air
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 which is causing severe breathing problems in the
people
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 of Delhi.
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, the building of major industries,
constructions
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road
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, … is increasing the space available for
people
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 to live freely. More
people
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 are living in small houses leading to several health disorders. In conclusion, life in a city has both
advatages
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advantages
as well as
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 disadvantages. High quality of living and better facilities in
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 of education, medicine … make
cities
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 a better place to live
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 the increasing pollution level is gradually making
people
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 aware of its consequences.
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, rural areas will seem to be more occupied in future.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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