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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views.

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Individuals have the opinion that it is
the
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best when you have
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 activity in cities.
However
, the opposites considered that
a
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life
 in the rural is a good way to enjoy. The author of
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life
throughout
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 big towns and will give the reasons why.
To begin
,
a
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life
 in the countryside would provide you
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healthy
life
. With the condition of the rural areas, they always plant several fresh vegetables and pick them to sell
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 other people.
Besides
 that, they even live in a friendly environment with enthusiastic local people and fresh air. They are usually active because they have to do a lot of physical work day by day
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 them healthy bodies and health.
However
,
a
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growth in the countryside does not always have good
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for them to live because of the bad material in human lives. The countryside can not afford them with
job
 opportunities and
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modern
in
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technology.
On the other hand
,
a
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city
life
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a the
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modern
in
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technology would be suitable for several requirement’s people nowadays. The plenty of chance to get a
job
 is variety so the community have
job
 security.
Furthermore
, facilities to support work are modern and technological.
As a result
, the
job
 is completed in a better way.
For example
, medical use the best facilities to save
person's
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life
 so city hospitals are the best choice for patients. Alternatively, the drawbacks of the city are pollution and congestion because
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the population is rising every day because there are plenty of advantages.
To conclude
, several individuals considered
about
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life
 in cities as better and the opposites would like to choose the rural
life
 for them. The author of
this
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ratherhave
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rather have
a
life
 in cities with its qualities and facilities suitable for nowadays’
life
 rather than a rural
life
.
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