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The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
The given table illustrates the percentage of unemployed Britons
time
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 spent over the
last
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 year for both males and females. The data
also
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 divided two different times spent by both genders which is morning and
afternoon
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. As can be seen from the fourteen types of activity, housework is dominantly done by the UK's women who did not have a job. Surprisingly, men have a high percentage of job hunting and shopping. Based on the previous year's data, almost half of the women in the UK who was unemployed spent
time
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 doing housework in the morning and 21% of them still continued doing
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 in the
afternoon
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.
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, it is surprising that only over a quarter of them did the shopping and another 17% still did it in the
day
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daytime
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time
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. Meanwhile, playing sport, drinking, and staying in bed is not what they did even though they do not have any jobs as drinking in the morning or
afternoon
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 is only represented by less than 9% of them.
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, the Britons who are men were unpredictably more likely to find job vacancies and shop in the morning with over a fifth of them killing
time
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 on
this
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 occasion.
However
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, the proportion of those activities
was
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decreased to 12 and 9
percent
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per cent
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.
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,
this
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 gender
also
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 had the same low percentages as the female ones on drinking, playing sports, and staying in bed both in the morning and
afternoon
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 with only below 9%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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