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Some feel that movies and tv shows are a good way to study history despite their lack of historical accuracy at times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people find that there are plenty of historical
movies
 and
tv
 shows which are considered to be a kind of
history
 learning source albeit the inaccuracy of facts sometimes. Personally, I agree with
such
 an opinion. They are good learning opportunities, especially for children as they love watching
tv
.
Besides
,
such
 kinds of media attract people to find
history
 fascinating.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable that visual effects in the modern world are overwhelmingly improved.
Along with
such
 improvement, comes
the
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magnificent films
as
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such as
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 “Troy”, “Braveheart” or “The Patriot” which are based on historical backgrounds. Children and youngsters lean towards watching
movies
 rather than reading books imagining the events in their mind’s eyes. As
such
, kids begin to learn
history
 unknowingly, and perhaps with better concentration as they delve into
movies
. Another point is the impact of audience attraction which will be discussed as follows.
Although
movies
 or
tv
 shows tend to be more dramatic rather than providing
with
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accurate background facts mainly for attracting the audience, they sure can persuade people to explore
history
. As a child, I was rather interested in Scottish costumes and culture after watching “Braveheart”. I still vividly remember that I was fascinated to find out more
on
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about
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 the American Revolution after watching “The Patriot”.
In other words
, even though books hold
the
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historical accuracy,
movies
 and
tv
 shows catch peoples’ curiosity better. In a nutshell, the good old way of reading books is yet a common way of delivering accurate
history
.
However
, with the help of modernization, films and shows are becoming preferable ways to explore
history
.
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