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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The diagram illustrates how the ground floor of a specific structure has changed over time between 1958 to present.
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, what stands out from the data is that the floor of the building remains unchanged
however
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, it transitions to three different types, where the number of
rooms
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also
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 decreases in number. In the year
of
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1958-,1984 the establishment was once an office with 6 various
rooms
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. The largest room accounts for the Manager's office, found on the right
side
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 of the building, in between the reception area and the Kitchen,
whereas
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 the Assistant and Secretary's offices are the smallest.
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, it was renovated as an apartment between 1985-2000 with only 5
rooms
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. Both the Living room and the master bedroom has equal sizes, located on the left
side
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 of the apartment. Meanwhile, you can find the rest of the room on the left
side
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. Presently, the building became a flower shop with noticeably 4
rooms
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 with two chambers on each
side
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.
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