In many countries the proportion of elderly people is increasing. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
It is a common belief
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the number of old Correct your spelling
that
people
growth
more than young and child citizens, and I think Verb problem
is growing
this
is true in multiple countries, In this
, essay I am going to discuss both cons
and pros views today. on the one hand, In the past young Correct article usage
the cons
people
were excited to have families and get kids and raise them in a good and healthy environment and this
effect
society in many categories. nowadays, Correct your spelling
affects
this
is rare in the city centre because of the quick lifestyle and the number of stress on young people
. In fact, young folks have a common misconception about getting married and think it is for old people
. Thus
, they like dating more than being committed to a partner and having children to look for. this
why
the government tries to reduce their work time and encourage young Add a missing verb
is why
people
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on the other hand
, living with grandparents will prove your roots as a person In fact, they will give you all the life lessons you need even if you think it is useless. In addition
, you could avoid any mistake they did
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made
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will build a strong personality and
keep you near your values and Correct word choice
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kept
you proud and knowledgeable. Wrong verb form
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As a result
,having new generations will lead the country to huge benefits in educational, medical, and new discoveries. For example
, the country that face
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problem could see their weaknesses in the number of armies, and to solve it they did a lot. In conclusion, I believe old and young people
are both important folks in any country and they equally affect our society in their own ways.Submitted by rayan on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite