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some people think that cities are the best place to live, other prefer to live in the countryside. Disscuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that cities are a worthful place to live
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 others argue that the countryside is better.
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 writer comes down the side of the countryside is the most worthful place to live. The case for reason can be made by pointing to the fact that living in rural areas gives the public a lot of benefits. Since the rural area is away from the noise, and air pollution of the
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, that will help
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 reduce stress and improve both physical and mental health. Extensive research has shown that the peace and serenity of the environment help people to walk upon depression.
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, it is obviously clear that living in the scenery is more worthful.
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, there is another perspective that living in the countryside is not as good as living in
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 areas. It is for that reason supporters think,
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 life is convenient and modern which is an advantage that land life certainly does not have.
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 point of view can be challenged because recently some rural areas have been developed with plenty of amenities and infrastructures.
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,
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 evidence is not convincing,
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, living in the land is better. Taking all points into account,
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 life has some advantages, all the given reasons above have demonstrated the fact that rural growth is more advantageous.
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,
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 essay has shown that people should live in the environment rather than the
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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