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The diagram  details the process of making smoked fish .

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The picture illustrates the process of making  smoked
fish
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 . There are 13  main stages in total in the process , beginning with  catching the
fish
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 in a fishermen's net and ending up with smoked
fish
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 delivered to the
fish
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 shop. The production of the smoked
fish
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 process commences with catching many fishes from the ocean . Caught
fish
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 are delivered to the port by small boat  and  In port, smoking
fish
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 goes through several steps.
Firstly
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 caught
fish
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 froze in the special
box
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then
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 the
fish
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  melts in fresh water . In the next stage  melted
fish
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 had was cut down and cleaned their bod. Next ,  cleaned
fish
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 was put into salt water and yellow colouring  , after that semi-finished product was smoked in the special dish. Smoked
fish
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 was packaged in the
box
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 and put into another
box
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 which is 0•C degrees cold
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,
this
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fish
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 was moved to another
box
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 which was called the cold store .
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 store through to the  distributor lorry and  give the smoke fishes to the gish shops .
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