The diagram details the process of making smoked fish .

The picture illustrates the process of making  smoked
fish
. There are 13  main stages in total in the process , beginning with 
catch
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the
fish
by
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in
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fishermen's
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a fishermen's
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net and ending up with smoked
fish
delivered to the
fishshop
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fish shop
. The production of
smoked
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fish
process commences with catching many fishes from the ocean .
Catched
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fish
delivered
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to the port by small boat  and  In port, smoking
fish
goes through several steps.
Firstly
catched
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caught
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fish
freezed
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froze
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in the special
box
 
than
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then
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fish
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the fish
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  melts in fresh water . In the next stage  melted
fish's
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had was
cutted
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down and cleaned their bod. Next ,  cleaned
fish
put
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into salt water and yellow
coloring
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  , after that
semi finished
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product was smoked in the special dish. Smoked
fish
was packaged in the
box
and put into another
box
which is 0•C degrees cold
than
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then
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,
this
fish
moved to another
box
which was called cold store .
This
store through to the  distributor lorry and  give the
smok
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smoke
fishes to the gish shops .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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