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The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
The diagrams below illustrate how the
centre
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 of Islip town is planned for development.
It is clear that
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 there are a lot of noticeable changes
such
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 as, the main
road
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 ring has been built and
also
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, several facilities buildings have been constructed. in the Islip town
centre
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 now, we can see that, the main
road
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 through runs from east to west. In the second map, pedestrianisation will be constructed.
Also
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 controlling traffic, a dual carriageway will be planned around the city
centre
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 for controlling traffic . Currently, there are several row
shops
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 along either the main
road
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.
However
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, in the north of the
,
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pedestrian the
shops
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 will be converted into the shopping
centre
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.
Also
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, some facilities
such
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 as a bus station, car park and new housing will be constructed.In the south of the main ,
road
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shops
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 will remain but in the south of the
shops
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 , the town’s park will be reduced and new housing along the side of the
road
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 will be built.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, road, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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