the graph below show the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

the graph below show the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph illustrates the closures and openings of
shops
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respectively in a particular country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
shops
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that shut down in 2015 had a minimum count but it rapidly increased after that. In comparison, the number of newly opened stores had a steady decrease throughout.
Firstly
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, the stores opened newly were between 8,000 and 9,000 in 2011 but it had a sudden downfall in the next year itself to half of it, nearly 4,000. It shows a rapid increase in 2014, near to 6,000
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, despite
this
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it slowly reduced to 3,000 in 2018.
Secondly
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, the
shops
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closed were nearly 6,000 at the start having a steady graph, until it reduced to the least number of approximately 1,000 in 2015. It
then
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improved in the later years to nearly 5,000 stores, showing steadiness until 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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