Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, building new
buildings
instead
of repairing them because repairing is expensive as new build that has become a popular topic and many people
think it is worth discussing. However
, they still have not come to an agreement with each other on whether the old building is built or the old building is repaired. Whatever each side of the argument thinks, I strongly agree that definitely, the old building should be made again.
There are many reasons why I think so. To begin
with, old building protection ability is decreasing for people
day by day because the material inside is frazzling and they make to
represent a risk for Verb problem
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people
. For example
, an earthquake occurred in Turkey 6 months ago and an old building was affected so many people
died. Moreover
, experts said that the whole old building was destroyed and built again because the building's durability loses
every 20 years. a natural disaster is not only important for Turkey but Wrong verb form
was lost
also
ıt is
a huge harmful effect on the world. Another reason is that The materials and techniques used in the apartment are changing. So every building will Verb problem
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the same techniques.
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On the other hand
, many people
think the opposite of my idea. First of all, They support that the old building reflects a past life. Besides
some old buildings
will become historical places in time. In addition
, these make country or city help money sources like tourism. A good example is that Varorha gospel town in Cyprus consists of old buildings
which show ancient history and so many tourist
visit there.
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tourists
To sum up
, in spite of the fact that old buildings
carry the old life, people
's life is more important than ancient history. Therefore
, the government should invest money in new buildings
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