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It is often said “when in Rome, do as the Romans do. ” Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they visit?Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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Nowadays as a
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 we have several problems regarding
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respect
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 other. Around 65%
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 in the world suffer
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 and xenophobia
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mutual incomprehension. On top of the
previos
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previous
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 mentioned we have to understand and
respect
 the foreign
culture
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 when you act as
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the foreign
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 person visiting
other country
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another country
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. From my perspective,
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people
 must
respect
 the
culture
 when they are visiting a country,
this
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adapt
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 and
accept
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accepting
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 the
behavior
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 of the local
people
 because you are getting the privilege to discover the stunning of a different
culture
 unlike yours.
For instance
, you have to take care of not only their religion like India if you are from
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 America but
also
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food because Indian
people
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 not eat meat cow, unlike
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south
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 American
people
. A main point of
respect
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cultures
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 could be the way that you take value for their monuments.
For example
, in China,
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visitor
people
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 to have a very respectful way to take photos in different temples related
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 very important families like
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 clan or
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 clan.
On the other hand
, I consider
that is
 not important the language when
your
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 are learning some staff from a different
culture
, because if you have
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entire
respect
 for other
people
 it will be completely possible.
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,
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mankind has developed
interest
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 in other cultures, it does not matter if you want to learn from India or China if do not speak their idiom. In conclusion, I consider that the phrase “when in Rome, do as the Romans do. ” is very true, not only because you need
yo
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respect
 other
people
 in other to get a good treat from
other
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others
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, but
also
, because you will get more acceptability from local
people
 either in Rusia or India.
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