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Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

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In
this
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 contemporary era, having more
education
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 increases the chances of getting highly-paid jobs. Some people think that
education
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 has become an essential part
to lead
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 a successful career,
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 others claim if we acquire a
skill
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 or talent, it can
also
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 help us to become eminent in our
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.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and give my opinion. On the one hand, Supporters of university
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 believe that if a person is post-graduate,
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 his or her demand in the market will increase more than other individuals. Because nowadays,
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 the
job
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 ,recession people are having a hard time finding even a simple labour
job
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.
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, Having a degree in hand can boost the reliability of hiring as employers can prefer a candidate with a higher
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 over a high school grad student.
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, It is a belief that people who are doctors and engineers have a more successful career than other professions.
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, an individual requires the highest level of
education
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 to enter into those professions. On the other side, those who do not give importance to a university degree opine that having the
skill
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 to do something is a must regardless of their qualification. To exemplify, There have been many cases in
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 world where most businessmen did not even enter a school or college.
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, Even though my father has not passed
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college, he is a well-known diamond entrepreneur owing to the fact that he possesses a great deal of experience and
skill
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 to be active in his industry. His experience and
skill
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 have given him significant knowledge which he can not gain from studying a book. In my opinion,
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Post-graduation
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 certification is a necessary requirement for professionals
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 as doctors or engineers.
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, there are other fields of the area where
education
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 is the least required namely merchant, painting or singing.
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, to become successful in a career one has to decide which
skill
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 they obtain or what degree they want to get admission into. If they follow the path of their capability and interest they can have
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life
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. In conclusion, Higher
education
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 aids in achieving a desired
job
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 and being a competitor in the
job
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 market,
while
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 having expertise
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assist
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 in living a contentful
life
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. In the end, It is up to us to choose the right path and work hard to live our dream
life
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.

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Use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repetitive phrases.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university degree
  • specialized knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • networking opportunities
  • vocational training
  • self-made entrepreneurs
  • gig economy
  • online courses
  • certifications
  • formal education
  • practical experience
  • lifelong learning
  • career goals
  • individual circumstances
  • academic qualifications
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