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The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.
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The pictorial chart illustrates the present industrial area in
town
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the town
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 of Norbiton and its proposed future developmental plan.
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, the present factories will be eliminated and housing buildings will be constructed with some other new facilities
such
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playground
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a playground
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 for children,
school
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a school
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shopping
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a shopping
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 centre and a medical centre. As it is evident from the map that the industrial area has several factories around the circular road and the farmland is beside the river which is in the north direction of the manufacturing companies. As per
planned
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 plot, all the industries will be wiped out and
housing
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a housing
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 colony will be constructed in that area.
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, the circular road will be extended
in
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west
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the west
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 and north
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 a bridge on the river which will lead to a residential building across the river.
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, other necessary facilities will
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 be provided which will include
hospital
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a hospital
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,
school
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a school
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 , a shopping centre
as well as
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 a playground for children.
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