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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do yoy think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages ?

#people #risks #lives #yoy
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Going out of the way from
conventional
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 path has become a new trend. It has become a debatable issue whether taking risks in personal and professional lives is advantageous or
have
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 some serious disadvantages. Both aspects
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 my perspective is discussed in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, some groups of folks say that choosing an unconventional path can prove quite stressful for a
person
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.
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, it is completely a daunting task to leave the job and start another career for a
person
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 who is well positioned in his job and earning
good
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. What if he fails,
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 may lead him to severe losses
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 as he may become
loanee
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a loanee
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 and even go bankrupt.
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 is the case for personal relations, society does not accept an individual who fails in his relations and never
consider
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considers
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 him to be respectful.To exemplify, people always gossip about a
divorcee
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divorced
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 lady and
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 her dignity.
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, taking risks has its positives
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 as it is better to have less income but a sense of satisfaction from work. Intellectuals
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 that a job
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 done from the core of the heart allows the
person
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 to work
deligently
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diligently
 and
delibrately
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deliberately
 resulting in higher profits for the company
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 for the employee.
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, considering personal relationships, it is again a win-win situation to take challenges.
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, a companionship in which two individuals are not compatible should not be continued because it
alter
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with
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happiness and in severe cases may lead to a depressed life.
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,
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 my viewpoint,
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 accepting challenges in personal and professional lives may have some negatives , the positives outweigh them and helps the
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 to have a happy and healthy life without any resentment and
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 why taking risks are worthy for life.
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