The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.

The bar chart compares consumer spending on

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different items in Germany, Italy, France and Britain.

It is clear that

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British

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spent significantly more money than

people

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in the other three countries on all

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goods. Of the

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items, consumers spent the most money on photographic film.

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in Britain spent just over £170,000 on photographic film, which is the highest figure shown on the chart.

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, Germans were the lowest

overall

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spenders, with roughly the same figures (just under £150,000) for each of the

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products. The figures for spending on toys were the same in both France and Italy, at nearly £160,000.

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while

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French

people

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spent more than Italians on photographic film and CDs, Italians paid

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more for personal stereos, tennis racquets and perfumes. The amount spent by French

people

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on tennis racquets, around £145,000, is the lowest figure shown on the chart.

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Aug 23, 2023

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