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Some people think cities are the best place to live in. Others prefer to live in countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Accommodation is a personal choice of an individual,
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 some prefer rural areas, others might like living in the urban area. Both lifestyles offer their own pros and cons
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 as in the countryside one can enjoy a fresh atmosphere
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 cities provide higher living standards and job opportunities. I believe that residing in an outskirt area not only gives a better environment but is
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 encouraged by the government.
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, the obvious advantage of metropolises is the infrastructure and amenities that enhance the
life
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 experiences of a person.
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, cities have shopping malls, cinema halls, and amusement parks for entertainment.
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, industries build their manufacturing units
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 their headquarters near the municipality that are the source of better employment and salaries.
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, because of the aforementioned reasons more and more population move to live in cities causing serious detrimental effects.
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, metropolises are becoming overly populated, suffocating, polluted and unhabitable.
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, living in the countryside is not only beneficial for physical health but
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 reduces mental stress. To illustrate, rural areas have lower levels of air, water, and noise pollution
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 people are healthy as compared to urban areas.
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,
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 the slow-paced
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 and involvement of the community country, people are happier and lead
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peaceful
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.
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, the cost of living in the rural residents is affordable and the government
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 provides subsidies to the people ready to move to the outskirts. In conclusion, despite the benefits presented by towns, a healthy and happy
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 provided by the country is more important than facilities and crucial for the
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 development of a nation.
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