Some people argue that governments should not pay money for the international aids when there are some disadvantaged people in their own country, such as the homeless and the unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today, many

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frequently switch their

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or professions every few years. In my opinion, there are some disadvantages

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essay. On the one hand, often changing their

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has some disadvantages. When

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quit their job so fast, they do not build up careers and owners of companies think that folks do not have patience which affect their image.

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, Korean society has serious conservatism so they do not like that kind of

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. If temporary workers quit their

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easily and find other cooperation, they will not get a job easily because the company's sharing applicant’s information.

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people

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's life becomes worse, and will not earn money.

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, the frequent switch has some advantages.

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a person who has a child, that person cannot work longer maybe need a part-time job.

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the present community trend has changed. Many young generations do not want to work hard like their parents generations.

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plenty of

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do not know what they really want and it is hard to find. But, If they change

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often, someday they will find what they want to do. Eventually,

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situation is good not only for employers but

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for employees because it can reduce unnecessary expenses and is good for our societies. In conclusion, often changing their

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is a double-edged sword. It is not good for building a career but it will help to find what they want. So, it depends on individual preference which one is better.

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