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the graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the Unite Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the Unite Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph indicates living in the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal people who average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per person between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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, beginning in 1967, the highest average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 were in the
UK
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 and the lowest
emissions
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 were in Portugal.
However
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, after four years until 2007, the
emissions
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 in these two
countries
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 became noticeably close.
On the other hand
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, the
emissions
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 in
Sweden
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 were more than in Italy in 1967, but start to reverse in 1987 until the end of the graph. In 1967, the
emissions
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 in the
UK
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 were far greater than in other
countries
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 around 11 metric
tonnes
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, but they were a gradual decrease in the
emissions
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.
On the other hand
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, Portugal was the lowest
emissions
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 compared to other
countries
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 around 1 metric tonne, but they stable increased and the opposite of the
UK
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 from 1967 to 2007.
At the end
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 of the information from the graph, the
emissions
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 in the
UK
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 were around 9 metric
tonnes
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 compared to Portugal's around 5 metric
tonnes
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 the
emissions
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 were a significant reduction
In addition
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, Italy and
Sweden
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also
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 had different patterns in
emissions
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. In 1967, The
emissions
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 per person in
Sweden
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 were around 9 metric
tonnes
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. After that, the
emissions
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 decreased significantly had declined to 5 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007 becoming the lowest average
emissions
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 in one of the
countries
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.
Conversely
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, the
emissions
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 in Italy was continuously rising between 1967 and 2007 had risen to around 8 metric
tonnes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, emissions, uk, countries, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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