The diagram illustrates various stages in the Aluminum recycle.

The diagram illustrates various stages in the Aluminum recycle.
The diagram above shows the 7 steps of the process of
aluminium
to be recycled.
Firstly
, used aluminiums that have been used by the consumers will be collected until reach the minimum quantities to be recycled. All of it
then
will be transported by a truck to the factory to continue to its next stage which is to make new cans.
Next,
by using heat the old
aluminium
will  melt down from its solid state to a liquid state.
Furthermore
, the process will result in new
aluminium
in block shape so that it will be easier to mould into the next stage.
Then
, the block will be pressed into a thin and long shape creating the
aluminium
roll using a compressor that put a lot of pressure on it.
Lastly
, the thin roll of
aluminium
will be shaped into new cans as it can be supplied to the drink factories to produce new batches of their product
such
as soda and can be consumed by its consumers.
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