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The given maps represent the island before and after the construction of several buildings for tourists.

The given maps represent the island before and after the construction of several buildings for tourists.
The given maps represent the
island
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 before and after the construction of several buildings for tourists.
Overall
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, the aforementioned
before
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island
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 experienced
dramatical
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 changes
such
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 as buildings of plenty of residential houses and
the
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reception
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 which highlights the fact that
this
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island
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 was fully oriented for the tourists. Upon initial observation, it becomes evident, that for the comfort of
visitors
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 the
island
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 was covered with
footpath
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a footpath
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 and vehicle track. The vehicle track is located around the
reception
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whereas
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 the footpath leads to every accommodation.
Moreover
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, as
it
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can be noticed from the maps, behind the
reception
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 and nearby the sea the restaurant was engineered. It is interesting to notice, that despite the absence of any changes, the beach was renamed
as
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a
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 swimming beach.
Furthermore
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, next to the
reception
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, a pier was built as a station for boats.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, reception with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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