In some of countries, the average weight of people is increasing, and their fitness levels are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Certain countries face with
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the problem
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of surging obesity of
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while
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declining. It is required
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establish
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poor trend and develop various solutions to address
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problem
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, the main cause of
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huge trouble
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not want to spend time in
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gym or
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of sport exercise. It is because individuals do not
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understand
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is essential for their health,
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obese, unfortunately, not
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to do sport.
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people
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work in offices do not
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lose and goal to do some exercise just for
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their health
indeed. Solution
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encourage
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healthy view to nation for understanding
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topic. 
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, certain
people
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can not
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stop or control
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their ration of daily calories and usually
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violate
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, some individuals
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realize
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of
diet
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and other
cind
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kind
people
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faced
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with huge options of
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the meal
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meal
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and forget about
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problem
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, should be
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some
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kind of app program to
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account
daily ration and
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information with their friends
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will
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people
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to make some challenges to each other and solve questions about
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. In conclusion,
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people
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are faced with a poor
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of obesity ,
,
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however
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there are various of
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problem
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, undoubtedly individuals should control their
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and daily exercise.
People
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should understand
of
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the importance of a healthy view and involve in their lives.
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