The chart beloew gives information about the purposes of visits to five cities in the UK in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
The given figure provides information regarding
reason
Correct article usage
the reason
of
Change preposition
for
visit
Fix the agreement mistake
visits
for
five different cities in the United Kingdom. For the most part, most frequently people Change preposition
to
visited
for Wrong verb form
visit
holiday
or business
purposes for all five ciities
.
Edinburgh and London witnessed a high Correct your spelling
cities
percent
of Replace the word
percentage
Holiday
visitors
. The number of holiday
visitors
overtook all other visitors
by a lot, for Edinburgh approximately three quarters
of its Add a hyphen
three-quarters
visitors
visit
for holiday
reasons, while
one quarter
Add a hyphen
one-quarter
visit
for all other reasons including business
and family visits. While
for London holiday
visitor numbers are neck and neck with Birmingham business
visitor; Note that nearly a quarter of londons
visits Correct your spelling
London
being
for Wrong verb form
are
business
purposes.
As for the remaining three cities, they seem to be more balanced, with no sharp high percentage for any visit
purpose. Half of birminghams
Correct your spelling
Birmingham
Birmingham's
visitors
visit
for business
reasons, which could set it as an outlier while
comparing Manchester, Birmingham, and Liverpool. Manchester and Liverpool indicate consistency with the percentages offered with all visit
purposes accounting for around a quarter per cent. Out of all three cities
Liverpool shows the highest Add a comma
,cities
holiday
visitor numbers with the percent
of family and friend Change the spelling
per cent
visitors
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visit, holiday, business, visitors with synonyms.
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