The chart beloew gives information about the purposes of visits to five cities in the UK in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart beloew gives information about the purposes of visits to five cities in the UK in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
The given figure provides information regarding
reason
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the reason
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of
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for
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visit
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visits
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for
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to
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five different cities in the United Kingdom. For the most part, most frequently people
visited
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visit
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for
holiday
or
business
purposes for all five
ciities
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cities
. Edinburgh and London witnessed a high
percent
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percentage
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of
Holiday
visitors
. The number of
holiday
visitors
overtook all other
visitors
by a lot, for Edinburgh approximately
three quarters
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three-quarters
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of its
visitors
visit
for
holiday
reasons,
while
one quarter
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one-quarter
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visit
for all other reasons including
business
and family visits.
While
for London
holiday
visitor numbers are neck and neck with Birmingham
business
visitor; Note that nearly a quarter of
londons
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London
visits
being
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are
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for
business
purposes. As for the remaining three cities, they seem to be more balanced, with no sharp high percentage for any
visit
purpose. Half of
birminghams
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Birmingham
Birmingham's
visitors
visit
for
business
reasons, which could set it as an outlier
while
comparing Manchester, Birmingham, and Liverpool. Manchester and Liverpool indicate consistency with the percentages offered with all
visit
purposes accounting for around a quarter per cent. Out of all three
cities
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,cities
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Liverpool shows the highest
holiday
visitor numbers with the
percent
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per cent
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of family and friend
visitors
barely evening out with it.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visit, holiday, business, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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