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Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely argued that government should give
people
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 whether they are poor or rich the
right
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 to get free higher
education
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.
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 a significant number of individuals support
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 subject for their own reasons, others oppose it. I strongly disagree with
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 statement for a few logical reasons which will be identified in
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 academic essay. On the one hand, some
people
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 agree with
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 topic for their own justifications.
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 with, governmental organizations are the only ones responsible for providing a good life for their nation, especially
students
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 after post-school, so they are committed to making
university
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education
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 free to encourage and support
students
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’ selection in any major they want. Another key reason that enhances the other verdict is that parents from different social classes suffer from high inflation, so they spend a large amount of money on household goods
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 necessary expenses. To explain
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 point,
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 need to save money in order to treat themselves by travelling abroad with their families,
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,but they cannot because of intensive obligations.
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, if governmental authorities pay tuition fees, families would be able to do some entertaining activities.
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, I deem that there be an enormous strain on a government budget if free access to
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 were a
right
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 for everyone. At its simplest,
people
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 from rich families can afford to tuition fees and for their own maintenance during their studies. Attendance at
university
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 is a privilege, not a
right
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, and if
students
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 can afford to pay for their studies. They should do so. In practical terms, governments cannot pay for the rich
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 the poor, but they can provide some free scholarships for excellent
students
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 who deserve special offers .
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, governments are faced with practical decisions on how to allocate a budget, and funding free higher
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 for everyone would mean less money and a budget deficit to spend on pressing issues
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 as healthcare and the environment.
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 reason is that
students
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 will depend on the government to access free higher
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.
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,
education
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 will be as weak as outcomes .
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, pupils have to work on themselves to achieve high per cent which allows them to be admitted to any
university
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 they desire for free. In conclusion, I fully disagree with the view that free higher
education
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 should be a
right
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 for everyone in society because it has negative consequences more than positive ones,
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, governmental organizations can support hardworking
students
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 via free scholarships.
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Ensure that the essay has a clear and logical structure, with a well-defined introduction and conclusion that effectively summarize the main points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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