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Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is indisputable that
nowdays
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human
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humans
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 are facing a bundle of environmental problems that harm our
planet
.
Consequently
, there are some
predications
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predictions
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 that our
planet
 will not be suitable for mankind and other species to live in the future. I totally agreed with
this
 statement and will shed light in
this
 essay on some reasons to support my opinion. Since 1800, it has been found that some human activities, including burning
of
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fossil
fuel
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fuels
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such
 as ( oil , gas ,and
coil
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coal
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) lead to
increase
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the
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 level of some gases like carbon dioxide.
As a result
 , the rate of carbon dioxide footprint is soaring gradually, especially in
the
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urban countries.
In other words
, overconsumption of some modern
of
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conveniences
lead
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leads
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 to air pollution.
For instance
, using Air
Conditioner
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conditioners
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 and vehicles are two main causes of
this
deterimental
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detrimental
 effect on the environment.
In addition
,
El
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 Nino phenomenon, which
occur
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occurs
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due to
 increasing sea level temperature will have a negative impact on marine
species
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species'
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 lives.
For example
, they may immigrate or die
due to
 the high temperature.
Thus
, the World Health Organization ought to warn nations about how to control
this
 tackle. Another reason
might
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 lead to considering our
planet
 unsuitable for
human
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specIes
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species
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 is
due to
 increase
the
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number of
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population
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 rapidly.
In other words
, enormous countries are suffering from food and water shortage
due to
the
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overpopulation with limited resources.
For example
, there
are
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is
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 some evidence of declining in
Nile
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the Nile
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 river level gradually in Egypt, which may face a
sarcity
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scarcity
 of water in the distant future.
Hence
, governments need to apply rules to prevent having more than two
child
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children
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 in one family. In conclusion, our earth is facing many challenges over the years which need serious actions to mitigate these problems, merely
as
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overpopulation and air pollution in order to keep our
planet
 a suitable place for survival.
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