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the table shows the amount of waste produced by different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000

the table shows the amount of waste produced by different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000
The table gives information about the number of
waste
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 produced by six various countries in1980、1990and 2000. It can be seen that US
waste
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produted
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produced
 annually is the highest in these cities about 4005
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes in 2000.From the table that
US
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the US
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 is
sustainable
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 increased and other increased cities include
Japen
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Japan
 and
waste
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 produced
annally
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annually
 from 44in1980 to 52 in 2000.
In
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contrast
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Poland
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waste
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 produced annually just 2
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millions
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million
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toones
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tonnes
 in 1980,3
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millions
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million
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toones
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tonnes
 in 1990 and 5 in 2000. Ireland、Krea and
Porugal
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Portugal
 are not showing well-aligned
increased
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.Ireland is
minimum
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the minimum
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waste
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 produced
annally
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annually
 in
these eitie
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 and it
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waste
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wasted
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 0.2
millons
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million
 of tonnes in 1980.Ireland even in 1990 there was no
waste
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 and KOREA
have
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had
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 the same condition in 1980.But we can
clear
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clearly
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 see that between 1990 and 2000,Korae
wasted
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waste
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 decreased by 10
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes.Portugal’s
waste
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of
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produced annually
increase
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increased
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 from 9.9 to10.1 and
feel
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fell
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 to 9.7 in 1980、1990 and 2000
To sum up
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, in 1980、1990 AND 2000 these six
countries
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countries'
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waste
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produce
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produced
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annally
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annually
 all
fluctation
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fluctuation
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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