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The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie charts show the
share
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 of three age groups of two countries’ populations Yemen and Italy in the
years
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 2000 and 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the biggest proportion of the two countries’ population is constituted 15-59
years
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 in both
years
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.
In contrast
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, Yemen showed that the largest
share
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 was 0-14
years
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 old in 2000. In Yemen, the biggest
share
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 of the aged population was the 0-14
years
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group
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 with approximately half of the total
share
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 in 2000,
whereas
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 over 60
years
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 old comprised the
last
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 rank with 3.6%. It is noteworthy that there was little difference between the figure for the 0-14
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group
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 and the 15-59
years
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group
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 with a narrow margin of almost 4%.
In addition
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, it is expected that the figure for the 15-59
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group
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 population will stand first with 57.3% in 2050,
while
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 that for the over 60
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group
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also
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 will remain in
last
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 rank with 5.7%. In Italy, at the beginning of the period, the 15-59
years
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group
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 comprised the biggest
group
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 with just over 2/3 total
share
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.
In addition
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, the percentage of the over 60
years
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group
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 was almost a quarter of the total
share
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, and the figure for the youngest
group
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 was 14.3%. It is predicted that there will be little difference between the percentage of the oldest
group
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 and the 15-59
years
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group
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, as that of the latter will stand first.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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