Some people think cities are the best place to live.Other prefer to live in the countryside.Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside

Nowadays,most of

people

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the people

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live in big

cities

.Some of the few live in the

countryside

,they have their own point of view and they decide

about

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where they live in the future.

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essay will demonstrate the writer's

feeling

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feelings

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and will give my own

feeling

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feelings

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about

this

statement. On the one hand,the

area

that

people

decide to live

has

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in has

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their

feeling

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feelings

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about it.The big

cities

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will be the best

area

for

people

to live.There

also

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are also

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many opportunities to get a job easily and education is the best

place

to study and collect knowledge for students in the future.

Moreover

,they have many

high technology

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equipment to help their life more comfortable and easy.But the environment here is polluted because many factories and companies exhaust

much

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smokes

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smoke

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making the air in

this

area

decrease seriously and many sick

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in that

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that

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community do not have medicine to solve it.Big

center

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centers

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are the best

area

to live and have a high percentage of getting a chance to find a job but they a dangerous

area

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areas

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with many crimes and thieves

make

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making

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people

worried about where they live.

On the other hand

,the most peaceful

area

people

can find to live

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in is

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the

countryside

this

area

is opposite with

big

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a big

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center

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centre

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.In the

countryside

people

do not go to

work

by car they go there on

feet

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their feet

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or ride a bike these ways will help the environment fresher,in

this

place

people

do not have high technology to use for chatting or calling they send a lecture together and wait for a moment to get a reply from the

people

that they send.Because

this

is the

countryside

so many things in

this

place

are very cheap to buy and

people

here are much friendlier than

people

in the

cities

.But

this

place

is out of the internet so the news about the world will be late to get in there for a few days and the education is not better than in the

cities

so many

people

will choose the

cities

as the

place

to study and

work

. In conclusion,

cities

or the

countryside

them

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is the best

place

to live and

work

in there,both of them have advantages and disadvantages.But in my own opinion,I think

cities

are the best

place

to live and

work

because

this

is the best

place

to study and has high opportunities to get a job easily

this

is my opinion and

also

the opinion of some

people

who want to have a good future in their life.

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