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Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

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It is true that advertising is increasing and become an indispensable part of our lives.
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 there are some drawbacks to advertising, I would argue that there are far more benefits The main drawback of the trend towards commercial is that appearing too much make
people
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 feel annoyed. In recent years, advertising has played an important role in our lives,
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, advertising goes far beyond making
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 have an aversion to it. There are even some advertisements that leave
people
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 unable to skip them. Another negative effect is that some businesses false advertising about their products. To illustrate, some brands said that their products can contribute to having beautiful skin.
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, when the consumers use it, their skins break out and they need to see doctors after it. Despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe that commercials are a positive development for various reasons.
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 with, run advertisements that can reach more
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, and let more
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 know about them. Technology is developing so it can help these commercials attract an ever-widening circle of
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 like
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 product.
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, more
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 will notice
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 product and buy them.
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, well-known
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 can get money from
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 advertisement.
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, if they have many followers on some social media, some brands will book them to advertise their products.
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 the reason why there are a lot of
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 who want to do
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 job nowadays.
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 is the easiest method to make money from adolescence In conclusion,
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 I recognise the possible disadvantages of advertising, I consider it to be a positive development
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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