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Some people thinks cities are the best place to live.Others prefer to live in the countryside.Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is argued that some
inviduals
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individuals
 love living in the urban
areas
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,which are the best
places
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 to live and have several advantages for everyone.
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,others tend to live in the rural
areas
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.From my point of view,the best place to live depends on personal preferences. Living in
cities
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offer
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offers
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 a range of advantages that make it an appealing choice for each
citizens
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citizen
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.
Firstly
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,
cities
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are provided
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people
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 with
the
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apply
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various
of
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apply
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job opportunities,which
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 dozens of industries and businesses.
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,it is extremely easy to get jobs with
a
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plenty of choices.
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,
cities
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 are typically well-equipped with educational institutions,
health care
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healthcare
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 facilities and convenient amenities.
Cities
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 are known for
the
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their
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 vibrant social
scences
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sciences
scene
scenes
 and diverse
commanities
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communities
.The presence of various
ethnicites
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ethnicities
 cultures ,
backgrounds
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and backgrounds
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are created
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a
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plenty of experiences.
People
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 who live in
cities
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 often
affect
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have
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 a variety of cosmopolitan
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lifestyles
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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,with a
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modern
 and attractive
places
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 like
restaurents
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restaurants
,museums and entertainment venues.
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,living in the countryside has its own unique vision.The countryside,which
offered
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offers
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 a sense of
tranquility
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tranquillity
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 and natural beauty
such
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greenery
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as greenery
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,fresh air,open spaces and so on
that is
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 often lacking in the hustle and bustle of urban
areas
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.
People
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, who prefer
a peaceful
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peaceful places
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places
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 to live may
attract
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with
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to
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 a pace in the
countrysides
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countryside
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.Living in the countryside can approach closer to nature.
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Individuals
 can engage in outdoor activities
such
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hiking
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as hiking
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,
gardening
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and gardening
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.Rural
areas
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 are
the
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apply
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significant
places
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 to relax,where
neighbors
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neighbours
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 often support and take care
to
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of
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 each
others
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other
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wholeheartly
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wholeheartedly
. In conclusion,both
cities
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 and the
countrysides
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countryside
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 have their
marits
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merits
 and drawbacks.Ultimately,the best place to live depends on each personal demand and lifestyle.Obviously,
Cities
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 are more suitable for
people
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, who love living in a bustle and
benefical
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beneficial
places
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 like teenagers and
early
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those early
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 ages,
while
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,
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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are
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is
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 more comfortable for
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individuals
 who want to retire and take
rest
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a rest
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such
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elderly
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the elderly
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.It is
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essential
estential
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essential
 to evaluate the factors and make an
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informed
imformed
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informed
 decision that aligns with their values and goals

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