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Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. •In what ways are computers a hindrance? •What is your opinion?

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Nowadays many people think that using
computers
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 proved to cause many disadvantages rather than its advantages.
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society has been facing problems
due to
 excessive use of them and
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light on why they are essential in today's world. On the one hand,people argue that there are increasing numbers of misuses of
computers
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Firstly
,
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the use of
such
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 among the young ones
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age where they have to be physically fit but
instead
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indoor
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.
This
 results in
sedentary
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 lifestyle which not only hampers their physical health but
also
 impairs their proper cerebral development.
For instance
, diseases like obesity and cardiovascular diseases are rapidly increasing among
this
 generation.
Secondly
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easy access to
internet
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in
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 those
computers
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many are involved in cyber crimes. Not only that
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by spending much of their time
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 those gadgets they become unsociable and from a young age they
donot
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do not
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 what is right and wrong.
On the other hand
, I
also
 think that these tools have become an integral component of our
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. Since
computers
 are versatile, efficient and accurate, they are useful to perform tasks at a greater speed.
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such
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Moreover
, in
this
 dynamic world where technological advances are made. People have to learn to adjust and adapt to
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ways
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way
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 of learning, teaching and presenting
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information
informations
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information
otherwise
 they might fall behind.
To conclude
,
although
 there might be many hindrances caused
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 the use of technologies
such
 as
computers
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in my opinion the significance of it is undeniable in
this
 present scenario.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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