Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Information about two possible positions for building a shopping centre in the city of Brandfield is presented by a map.
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while
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both sites are close to the centre of the city and have access to the road and the railway, the first one is in the north-central part close to the housing estate and the other one is proposed to be in the
south-east
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southeast
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near the industrial estate. The northern location's main negative is being near a river, which is dividing Brandfield into two parts going from the northeast to the southwest.
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can cause problems with the process of building the shopping mall, but
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will be compensated by the fact that most of the housing is going to be just left of the building. The second position is to the left of the Industrial area, which will make building easier but access harder. There is not a third proposed location on the west side of the city
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the fact that a golf course is located there taking almost all of the space.
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  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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