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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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,
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describes
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 a
park
 when it was first constructed in 1920 versus the same
park
 nowadays. Back
then
 in 1920, the Grange
park
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Park
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 was designed in a very simple way consisting
a
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fountain in the middle and a few rose gardens.
However
, today it has developed a lot including a lot of facilities
such
 as children’s play area, café etc.
To begin
 with, the
park
 made in 1920 had a pond for water plants at the right corner of Arnold Avenue and a Glasshouse in front of it.
Furthermore
, we see three rose gardens, two of them are on each
side
 of
Arnold
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the Arnold
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 Avenue entrance,
while
other
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the other
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 one is on the left
side
 of
Eldon
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the Eldon
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 Street entrance. There is
also
 a stage for musicians on the left
side
 of
fountain
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the fountain
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.
Lastly
, seating
facility
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facilities
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 are
also
 provided
with
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at
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 both the entrances
as well as
 on
left
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the left
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side
 of
rose
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the rose
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 gardens. In comparison, if we look at the present
park
 construction, we find a
square shape
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square-shaped
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 rose garden in the middle with places to sit around its four sides. There is
also
 an underground parking constructed and
it’s
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its
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 entrance is on
right
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 corner of Eldon Street. On the left
side
 of the
park
, an Amphitheatre is built particularly for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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