Some people believe that there should be a tax on fast fashion to fund environmental protection activities. Do you agree or disagree? Student2

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tax

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on wear-it-once-and-throw-it-away fashion

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to be imposed to

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the

enviromental

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environmental

conservation activities. From my personal perspective, I firmly endorse

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opinion.

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essay will examine and shed light on both the merits and demerits of

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action,

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come

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into

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the conclusion to protect my personal viewpoint. It can widely be acknowledged that the fast fashion industry is posing threats to the surroundings. It directly

affect

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the environment, because the pollutant that those factories emit

to

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the air makes the air quality even worse. Not only by creating bad impacts on the atmosphere

,

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the

manufactures

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manufacturers

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putting

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harmful effects

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the soil, land, water

suppy

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supply

etc. There host of activities

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benefit

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the

economy

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status and the job opportunities for the workers, but

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other

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side of the coin, the detrimental influence that

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industry may cause to the whole society, especially the

enviromental

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environmental

problem, is the urgent

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of today's society. To tackle the problem, I strongly agree that the

tax

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for fast-fashion companies should be implemented by the government. On the one hand, it would alleviate the pressure on the environment, by creating the funds to do

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apply

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the

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actions to protect our natural habitats. From these specific actions, the

enviroment

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environment

could be miles better. It

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represents the concentration of the government and stakeholders to put eyes on

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pressing issue.

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,

rasing

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tax

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taxes

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for funding

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to fund

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environmental problems would

encourages

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the

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citizen

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citizens

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to take

responsibilities

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responsibility

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for their actions. They should care more about

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environmental issues and join hands to

upgrade

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that situation. The fast-fashion industry

is not only

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does not only include

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include

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the

manufactures

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the workers, retailers, buyers etc. The

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paying is just an action to make

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remember

of

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their responsibilities. In summary, the action of paying

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tax

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taxes

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to raise

fund

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funds

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for environmental

issue

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issues

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is

realistic

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a realistic

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step to protect the environment.