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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organizations. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Nowadays the jobs and salaries are completely terrible. The majority of workers are being overutilized and they are working more
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 for less
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,
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 is absurd, not only because they are losing their family time but
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, because they do have not the
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 to buy something.
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,
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 think
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 much better to get their own business. Most workers in the world are working many
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, more than 48
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 per week,
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 is something really insane. There are many companies that are paying less and saving in taxes. The migrations from Venezuelan and Mexican
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 have a fundamental role because
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 massive migration in countries like Canada or the United States, employers have considered giving them bad conditions
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. The bad conditions to
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, generate unhappy workers.
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, they will opt to
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 by themselves.
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, they will earn more
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 and will
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 fewer
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 per week, and most importantly they will spend more time with their family. Is important to mention that low salaries and long shift of
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 is
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 of the several reasons that
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 prefer being self-employed. The other reason is the stress and the quantity of tasks or assignments that the bosses give them. Being self-employed has many advantages. Briefly,
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 of them is having more time to share with family, and
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 but not least, having calm and no long days of
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, there are disadvantages,
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 the most important is the
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, sometimes
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 are able to earn a good quantity of
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 in
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 month and other times is really difficult to get at least the
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 to live or pay the food, rent, etc.
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, being self-employed is really harsh and is really difficult to find a good place to
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. In ,life there are many issues and complications.
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 should
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 that they really feel comfortable with and try to create a good balance.
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