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The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use number. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Providing free schooling
up
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 to six years will enable people how to read, write
as well
as
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use
number
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numbers
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 and eventually it will be the foremost procedure to remove poverty from developing nations. I
am strongly agree
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 with that statement as
this
 system will develop
individuals
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 ethical behaviour
to
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 their resources and will help one to establish a new
business
. Now, I will articulate my point of view in the forthcoming paragraphs. From an
overall
 perspective, there are several merits of free
education
. Perhaps the predominant benefit is ethical behaviour to their resources.
As those
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 persons who have some basic educational knowledge,
they
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do not
make
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any
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misuse
of
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their country's wealth.
As a result
, one region's wealth can be utilized properly.
For example
, a recent study found that 20% of natural gas is used more by illiterate people as they do not know how to
use
 it properly. That's why I believe that
education
 is required for a certain period of time. A
further
 point in favour of
this
 free schooling is that it helps people to generate
idea
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of
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 starting modern
business
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businesses
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. If individuals have some basic knowledge of reading,
writing
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and writing
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 and
use
 numerical data, they can
use
 their thinking ability to process
up to date
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 shop. By establishing a modern
business
, they can not only reduce the unemployment rate but
also
 provide
economical
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benefit
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benefits
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 for a community.
For instance
,
according to
 a survey, those human beings who stopped their
education
 at the age of 12 or 13, ended up
a
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as
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 successful
businessman
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businessmen
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 or a politician and they are helping their nation to a great extent. In conclusion,
free of cost
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a free-of-cost
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education
 system not only
help
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helps
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 one to gather ethical attitudes to the resources of his/her region but
also
help
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helps
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 to stage a new
business
. And these activities
helps
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help
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 a nation to achieve
further
 benefit.
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