The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The bar charts illustrate the
illiteracy
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rates
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in four different
regions
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categorized by gender, for the previous year.
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, the statistic of male
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has always been lower compared to the one for
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Male
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rates
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have consistently remained lower than those for
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across all
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.
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Specifically, in three
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(Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South Asia),
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rates
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were notably higher for both genders. Over the recorded period, the percentage of illiterate individuals was at its lowest in developed countries, where they constituted an insignificant (negligible) minority, with a percentage accounting for merely 1%
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males
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and 2%
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females
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, in Latin America/Caribbean and East Asia/Oceania, these
rates
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represented a smaller (fraction) minority, ranging hovering between 10% and 20%.
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, the remaining
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showed/ demonstrated the highest percentages. Notably, Sub-Saharan Africa and the Arab States exhibit similar
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rates
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, standing at 31% for
males
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49% for
females
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, and 29%, for
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and 51% for
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, respectively.
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, South Asia recorded the highest
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rates
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for both genders, with figures reaching 33% for
males
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and 56% for
females
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.
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