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Some people say that the main enviromental problems of our is loss of particular species of plants and animals .Others say that their are more important environmental problems.discuss both views and give your oinion

#people #loss #species #plants #animals #oinion
Many have a perception that the prominent reason
of
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environmental
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the environmental
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issue
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issues
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 is
due to
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the decrecing
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decrecing
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decreasing
 number
in
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of
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 species of plants and animals.Other
group
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 of people believe that there are so many other reasons
of
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this
situations
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.
This
eassy
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essay
easy
 will not only discuss both perspectives but
also
shedlight
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shed light
my
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 point of view in
conclusion
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. There are myriad things to be shared about the endangered species importance in
environment
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the environment
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. First and
formost
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foremost
is
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animal
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animals
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 and plants play a vital role in
ecosystem
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ecosystems
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 because all are
interdepend
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 and interconnected to each other.
Moreover
,a good environment
need
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 the
existance
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existence
 of all organisms ,they are interacted
between
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and
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its
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their
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surroungs
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surrounds
surroundings
.
In addition
to
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,
this
 help to maintain natural habitat for
the
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apply
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living thing
accross
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across
 the globe.
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, a food chain and food web
existed
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 in ecology ,
in
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this
 process organism
in
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are in
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 a linear sequence
that
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which
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 means one organism
depend
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ondepend
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 another for survival. So the
lose
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loss
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 of the
particularspecies
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particular species
 leads to
imbalance
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an imbalance
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 of nature .
This
 directly and indirectly affects each and every entity and structure of our plant. Moving towards
the
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another aspect, a few people think that there are
a lots
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a lot
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 of factors affecting our surroundings.
Firstly
,
human
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humans
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 are responsible
to
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 the present worst situations because they are not bothered about
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needs and wants of
next
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the next
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 - generation.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, we have limited resources so should be used properly
otherwise
 leads to
scarcity
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a scarcity
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 of materials. People are regularly doings errors
such
 as
deforenstationand
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deforestation and
 building industries. These factory
outlets
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outlet
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 functions make our
enviroment
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environment
 more pollutant and imbalance
i
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in
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 nature. These errors
leads
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lead
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 to natural calamities like flood, earthquakes and global warming.
To sum up
, I believe human activities
also
make
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lot
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a lot
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 of ecological issues .
Although
,
loss
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the loss
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 of species of flora and
funa
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fauna
also
 affects our environment badly.
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