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Some people think that access to internt is necessary to live a full life ? Do you agree or diagree ?

Some people think that access to internt is necessary to live a full life ? Do you agree or diagree ?
#people #access #internt #life #diagree
Nowadays masses become more interested
about
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internet
 technology and with it is
expand
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.As it creates easy and flexible lives for us.some people
believes
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 that travel is
an
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essential to discover
others culture
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other cultures
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 and
thoer
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other
the
their
 tradition
while
 others
argued
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 that no need to travel as the
internet
 can do and
dicover
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discover
others
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 lifestyle.
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argue
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and disagree
of
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 both arguments. There is no
deny
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 that a
traval
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travel
 to
foreign
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a foreign
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 country
assist
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 to
creates
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special
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 feeling as it
concering
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concerning
concern
 with physical treatment and take rest from pressure and work stress.
In addition
,
with
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travel nowadays become
as
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a
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content
in
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 many social media
platform
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platforms
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 as they share
thier
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their
traveling
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 with all people from all over the world and become
as
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a freelancer .
On the other hand
 ,
internet
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allowed
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 individuals to access all over the world in a few
minute
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.
Furthermore
, they can
dicover
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discover
 global by the
internet
 with
is is
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 several
program
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programs
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.
For instance
, some people can
chatting
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 with
thier
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their
 friends in other countries as it
allowed
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him
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them
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 to learn more
the
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 culture and traditions of other
country
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countries
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 and
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 online course school . All of
this
 can
occr
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occur
 once you open your laptop at
homes
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.
To conclude
, many
culture
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cultures
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 and traditions can
we
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be
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knowing
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it
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through
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the world
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world wide web
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World Wide Web
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.
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