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The chart below shows the number of handicapped children registered in special education schools in vietnam from 1995 to 2010.

The chart below shows the number of handicapped children registered in special education schools in vietnam from 1995 to 2010.
The provided bar chart illustrates the number of handicapped children registered in
a
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four private education schools in
vietnam
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 from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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 , it can be clearly seen that there was a
sharply increased
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 in ABC
school
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 and north
school
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 during five years ago . Looking in more
details
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, there was a
rapidly increased
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 in ABC
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school
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schools
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 for
registerd
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registered
of
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handicapped kids .
In contrast
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 there was a
deceased
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decrease
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 in SPED
school
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 during 5 years ago from 300 to 100 children . Which
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considerd
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considered
considers
 the lowest figure
amongest
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among
 the other
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school
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schools
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.
On the other hand
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 , in
west
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school
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,school
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 there was a
slightly declined
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 in the registered
of
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the
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kids in 1995 from around 450
then
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 went down
about
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 220 children in 2010. One notable point is that the number of
student
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 in ABC
school
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 and North
school
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 were
equal
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 increased.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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