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Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart presents information about the percentage of renewable
energy
 from the total
energy
 used in
the
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Australia
, Sweden,
Iceland
 and Turkey between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
,
Iceland
 was the domain figure throughout the period,
while
Australia
 and Sweden showed the lowest results. Another interesting point is that Turkey and
Australia
 had a downward trend
,
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 when Sweden and
Iceland
 moved up.
Australia
`s figure
falled
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fell
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 to approximately 5 per
cent
 from initial data of just under 10 per
cent
. Alternative
energy
 was most popular in
the
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Iceland
, starting
with
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 45 per
cent
 in 1997
then
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and then
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raised
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rising
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 sharply to 60 per
cent
 after three years.
At the end
 of the
period
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 renewable
energy
 occupied 70 per
cent
 of
Iceland
`s total
energy
 supply. Moving to
the
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Sweden`s
drawn
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drawing
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, it showed a reverse trend
comparing
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compared
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 with
Australia
. It is started at 5 per
cent
, becoming equal to
Australia
 in 2000(7%). In
the
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2010
the
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8 per
cent
 of
the
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Sweden`s total
energy
 consisted
by
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of
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 renewable
energy
. Turkey showed
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a rose
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rose
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 in the beginning from 38% in 1997 to 41% in 2000.
Then
 there was
declining
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a decline
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 to 32% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, australia, iceland, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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