In some area of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of door after particular time at night unless they accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
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nighttime
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as there are not a lot
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at all.
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sense
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people
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, the crime rate is increasing from the past so it might be safer if there is an
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children
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apply
people
who we do not know that are dangerous for teenagers or not during night
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nighttime
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as there are not a lot
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outside. Furthermore
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of the young adult
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apply
which
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sense
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people
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of themselve
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