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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some Western countries, young people
such
 as
students
 who graduated from high
school
 are encouraged to take a gap year to travel or
work
 before they go to
university
 to study. Why it happens? Let's start off with the advantages and the disadvantages of both views.
To begin
 with the advantage,
students
 are encouraged to
work
 or travel, It is a good time for them to take a break after a long journey of study from kindergarten to high
school
. In
this
 way,
students
 will have more opportunities to have new experiences in their lives. From that, they will know more about life, what they will be known or what are their hobbies and what they will be in charge of their life
while
 they are travelling.
Moreover
, By the
,
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way young people are going to
work
, They will not only have experiences from their jobs but
also
 have chances to practice the knowledge that they have earned from the
school
 system. Everything always has a
constract
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contract
 view, By taking a gap year, they could waste their time to continue studying which will cause them to not have enough mood to back to the academy.
Moreover
, there are some people who enjoy making money from their
work
, It has led them to forget to back their major in
school
.
Unfortunately
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 situations, If they were unsuccessful in their jobs,
students
 would struggle with their mental and social lives which
also
 cause them to forget to jump into
university
 again.
For instance
,
This
 problem happens in most of the states in America when some adults
were
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 unemployed because when they
were
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 young, they
did
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 not back to
university
 and
did
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 not have
a
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 academic diploma.
Finally
, Again, taking a gap year for
students
 who finished high
school
 is a good idea to see their hobbies but we need to encourage and remind them to get back from the
university
 to continue to study. It will make less risk for them for their future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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