One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

People are living longer and have higher life expectancy

as a result

of better medical care. I think

this

development has both advantages and disadvantages.

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Above all

, advancements in medicinal treatment

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doctors to apply the most effective methods of treatment, or treat diseases thought to be uncurable before. Medical

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may take half as usual with proper technology,

as well as

new medicinal breakthroughs could treat conditions

such

as Alzheimer's or rabies.

For example

, a new breakthrough in cancer research

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in the US, a vaccine

that is

capable of eliminating a vast majority of cancer cells, which might become a new effective cancer treatment.

Although

the vaccine is still in

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testing phase, it could redefine the whole pharmaceutical world as we know it today.

On the other hand

, with each advancement, nursing becomes increasingly expensive.

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technology requires money to be spent and paid for, which is taken from the patients and the government.

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,

while

the US might have

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technology when it comes to pharmaceutics, the prices are outrageous. A simple trip on an ambulance could cost individuals tens of thousands of dollars without health insurance,

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developing countries

such

as India, Bangladesh or South Africa might not have the best methods of healing, but they are considerably more affordable. In conclusion, without a doubt, improved medicinal care and higher life expectancy

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a positive

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all countries, but it does not matter if a person can not afford it.