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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is a perception that ladies should concentrate more on babysitting rather than adopting professional careers in their lives because they manage their
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 in a better manner. I strongly disagree with
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 idea of gender suppression as raising
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 is not gender gender-related job and would result in the economic fall of the current economy.
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 essay will discuss the impact of
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's elimination from professional jobs for the sake of their children look after. The first reason to contradict the feminine dominant childcare idea is that it is not a gender-related job.
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 and
women
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 equally qualify for
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 role depending on who is more capable of handling the issues of their
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.
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, some
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 are more tolerant and cool-minded as compared to their female partners who sometimes get irritated on minor things.
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 , there is no reason to credit
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 for
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 role if
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 have more potential to do the same. Another reason for
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 contradiction is the national economy, where
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 play a vital role.
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,
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 sometimes prove more talented and critical thinkers as compared to
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 in certain jobs.
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, if you disregard the female Nobel prize winners who contribute to the field of biology and science, we will find ourselves decades away from our technological growth.
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, discrediting them from the job career would not only affect the economy of the country but
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 create an inferiority complex in them.
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, raising
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 is not related to either
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 or
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, it should be a mutual understanding between both.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary caregivers
  • biological factors
  • maternal instincts
  • nurturing
  • workforce
  • career growth
  • income equality
  • family dynamics
  • shared responsibility
  • gender stereotypes
  • economic disparities
  • traditional roles
  • modern family
  • active roles in childcare
  • opportunity and support
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